Story Reviews

A.A.Cain has graciously given us a window into another place and time. The year is not mentioned, current events are not referenced, famous people are not tied in; we are provided with just the right amount of detail to bring a careful reality to the setting. When this story unfolded around me I wanted nothing: not more sex, not more players, not some psychological crisis; the story was just enough to leave me satisfied. Read this story, and anything else by A. A. Caine.

a a I really do not want to sound like the old man ogre swatting at a young new writer. Yet reviews ought to be honest. From the beginning, this feels choppy, unrefined. The premise, that "a young woman walked from tennis practice into the dark woods, found a primal lover, fucked him and thus missed her blind date" was strained. I couldn't shake the feeling this was cut and paste from other works, but I hope I am deeply wrong on this. With some rewrites with attention to flow, descriptions and continuity this story would be better. My best advice would be to read, read, and read more. Develop a feel for how the best stories flow, how the characters are developed and how the actions are described. The best writers read much more than they ever would write.

Is in no way a completion of the Book One.

Wonderfully written, a sensuous experience. Perfect for an afternoon beside your own fireplace and a pot of tea. Careful descriptions; I liked the warmth and touch of sophistication this story provided me. The only suggestion I would offer is to consider the flow rate of the story. The beginning had me sitting a bit impatiently to be replaced with a bucking ride as the wondrous finale unfolded. I wanted not more but more slowly, perhaps even matching the pace of the beginning. I will read this again, for it lifted my spirits and perhaps even left me a slightly better man.

Good character development. Nice flow. Sometimes when the events move quickly, it could be a bit more helpful to the reader; if that matters. Nicely written tale.

Quite a nice, novel premise. A story with much promise and a promising future. My only suggestion with the little that is here would be to watch for a choppy flow, and to be careful with pronouns--so that they not stray too far from their anchoring noun.